TLC by Chrouya
Script:	 Magi 03 [TL Joon][Shit Timed to Zero Raw][Edited]
Workraw: Magi03-RC

11
You're the reason that filthy commoner was able to trick me!
You're the reason I got fooled by that filthy commoner!
{there's no potential form in this sentence}

18
It's deserted down there.
Not a single soul out there.
{literal expression}

20
It's a necropolis.
A necropolis.
{wouldn't it be better to keep this shorter, making use of ellipsis}

22
Outside the strongroom, one can find a necropolis, or a city of the dead.
Outside the strongroom, one can find a necropolis: a city of the dead.
{you make it sound like a necropolis is not the same as a city of the dead}

45
Where do you think {\i1}you're{\i0} going?
{\i1}You{\i0}, hold your horses.
{In my opinion, it sounded too long and it's not a question, so I used another expression. Edit is necessary.}

120
{\i1}He's someone who can crown kings.{\i0} {TLC plox}{Original: He's the one who leads the king.}
*I'm fine with this liberal translation. As alternative, you could use the word "Guide" for the original line}

151
but you're not as impressive as you claim to be.
but I don't find you as impressive as you claim to be.
{it sounded like he's stating a fact, but he's just sharing his opinion}

176
I am an embodiment of convention and discipline.
I am an embodiment of propriety and discipline.
{alternative, of course.}

197
And also, what do you mean I inherited King Solomon's spirit?
That aside, tell me, what do you mean I inherited King Solomon's spirit?
{different conjunction}

244
I've always been a horrible failure because of that.
I've made terrible mistakes because of that.
{found the line too liberal. He says that he has failed horribly at such times}

256
I respect you because you're a good friend of mine!
After all, you're my friend whom I respect!
{The reasoning isn't correct here}